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The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The charts show information about how the ownership of electrical appliances has changed and the
hours
 spend in households doing housework in one country from 1920 to 2019. Overall, what stands out from the graphs is that in the beginning few
people
 has electrical appliances and more time was spent on doing housework in households during the given period. Looking into the details, In 1920 around 0% of
people
 have refrigerators but the percentage increased rapidly and in 1940 around 55% of
people
 were having refrigerators.
This
 number again increased to 90% in 1960 and touched 100% in 1980 but after that, it remain unchanged for the rest of the period.
Similarly
, in 1920 around 30% of
people
 have a vacuum cleaner and
this
 number increased to 50% in 1940. In the
next
 40 years, there was an increase of 40% and it touched 90% in 1980. With a 10% increase, it achieved the highest level of 100% in 2000 and remain unchanged rest of the period. For Washing machines, In 1920 about 40% of
people
 used them but around 70% were using them in 1960. There was a marginal change in the percentage of
people
 who owned washing machines and in 2019 around 72% of
people
 have them.
In contrast
, if we look into the time spent on household work, around 50
hours
 were spent in 1920 and in the
next
 40 years, there was a sharp decline in average working
hours
 spent weekly on household work. In 1960
people
 were spending around 20
hours
 per week but
this
 decreased to 10
hours
 per week in 2019.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • increase
  • decrease
  • limited access
  • introduction
  • tasks
  • efficient
  • rely
  • technological advancements
  • socioeconomic factors
  • availability
  • resulted in
  • leisure time
  • correlation
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