Many working people get little or no excercise either during the working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

A lot of
people
have
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not
time
to do exercise, especially working
people
, and as
result
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they have health troubles in future. Workers have more reasons why they cannot spend
time
on sports. Working
people
abide by their timetable and tarry at
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the task
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task
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. One of the root causes is that employees have a hard
job
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jobs
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and
deadline
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to
do
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apply, so they cannot have enough
time
for other things like sports. Society
work
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hard and sometimes can spend a whole night applying finishing tasks. To solve
this
problem employers, need to right manage
college's
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timetable and give them more free
time
.
For example
,
people
can stay at the workplace from 9 AM to 6 PM and
then
, go to the gym or home to relax. Another reason could be that
people
do not delight in sports. They
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prefer
toprefer
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prefer
spend
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time
on social media,
instead
of carrying about their own health.
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, watching movies and scrolling Tic Tok or Instagram can give the
imagination
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of relaxation. The solution is that
people
need to understand how is valuable work out. If someone spends an hour at the gym daily, they can have a strong immune system and more energy. In conclusion,
working
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society
need
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needs
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balanced
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lifestyle. Employers should take more care of their employees. Overall, citizens
also
need to think about mentioned issues and job-life
balance
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balanced
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timetable.
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