Many working people get little or no excercise either during the working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
A lot of
people
have
not Add a missing verb
do have
time
to do exercise, especially working people
, and as result
they have health troubles in future. Workers have more reasons why they cannot spend Add a comma
,result
time
on sports.
Working people
abide by their timetable and tarry at Add an article
the task
a task
task
. One of the root causes is that employees have a hard Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
job
and Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
deadline
to Fix the agreement mistake
deadlines
do
apply, so they cannot have enough Unnecessary verb
apply
time
for other things like sports. Society work
hard and sometimes can spend a whole night applying finishing tasks. To solve Change the verb form
works
this
problem employers, need to right manage college's
timetable and give them more free Correct article usage
the college's
time
. For example
, people
can stay at the workplace from 9 AM to 6 PM and then
, go to the gym or home to relax.
Another reason could be that people
do not delight in sports. TheyCorrect your spelling
prefer
toprefer
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prefer
spend
Fix the infinitive
to spend
time
on social media, instead
of carrying about their own health. For example
, watching movies and scrolling Tic Tok or Instagram can give the imagination
of relaxation. The solution is that Replace the word
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people
need to understand how is valuable work out. If someone spends an hour at the gym daily, they can have a strong immune system and more energy.
In conclusion, working
society Correct article usage
a working
need
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needs
balanced
lifestyle. Employers should take more care of their employees. Overall, citizens Correct article usage
a balanced
also
need to think about mentioned issues and job-life balance
timetable.Correct your spelling
balanced
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite