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Nowadays, many people prefer to buy famous brand of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Contemporarily, it is quite known that a significant number of
people
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 are interested in purchasing designer
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 and driving fancy
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.
Society
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 has
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 to the extent that fashion has become a competition.
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 essay will consider some of the reasons for
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, and the impact it has on individuals and
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 at large.
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, lots of
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 have become fashionistas currently, and rush to buy new trends.
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 are keen to drive the latest model of
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.
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 may be due to the fact that driving luxury
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 and possessing other popular items depict your wealth, in that, it shows your current social status.
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, owning an
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iPhone
 13 in
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 modern time indicates that you are rich.
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, in my opinion,
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 always want to be recognised and sometimes want to feel confident
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wherever they are,
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, tend to appear attractive with a famous dress and other items
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 as watches and phones.
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,
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, I believe,
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 both positive and negative impacts on individuals and
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.
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 would always want to appear lavished,
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, will do all
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 of things to ascertain
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.
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 could increase the crime rate
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 as frauding and arm robbery. Younger children could copy
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 behaviour and in the long run, affect
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future generations. In terms of the pros, young adults who see the positive aspects of
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 situation could strive harder to achieve a
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higher-level
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 of status in
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.
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, a teenager who
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cars
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 and would like to drive one could work or learn hard to be wealthy in future. They would do all kinds of legal jobs to achieve their dreams in the years ahead of them. In conclusion, possessing brands of clothes and other items is not a bad thing, but in my perspective, the means
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 which these things are acquired matters the most. Children look up to these
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 in our country,
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, citizens should make sure they use the right means to own these luxuries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brand Loyalty: Consumer preference for a particular brand that results in continual purchase over time.
  • Status Symbol: An item that signifies one's social or economic status.
  • Prestige: Widespread respect and admiration felt for someone or something on the basis of a perception of their achievements or quality.
  • Quality Assurance: The maintenance of a desired level of quality in a service or product.
  • Innovation: The introduction of new ideas, methods, or products.
  • Marketing Strategy: A business’s plan for reaching prospective consumers and turning them into customers of their products or services.
  • Consumerism: The preoccupation of society with the acquisition of consumer goods.
  • Peer Pressure: Influence from members of one's peer group to behave in a way that is acceptable or similar to them.
  • Advertising Influence: The effect that advertising has on consumer decisions.
  • Materialism: A tendency to consider material possessions and physical comfort as more important than spiritual values.
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