Nowadays, people in some countries live in two diffrent houses becouse of their jobs. These are private house and rental house. It is advantages and disadvantages discusses in the essay.
Nowadays,
people
go to abroad working
, they often live in rented Wrong verb form
work
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because
becouse
they Correct your spelling
because
have
not effort money Add a missing verb
do have
buy
Fix the infinitive
to buy
the
new Correct article usage
a
house
so they live in rented
Add an article
a rented
the rented
home
.However
, it is good as it is cheaper to rent.for example
, If you want to buy a new house
, you will lose a lot of money so it is better to live a
rental Change preposition
in a
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because
becouse
you only pay Correct your spelling
because
monthly
fee. Even if you can buy a new Add an article
a monthly
the monthly
house
, you will Add a missing verb
have to
to
buy household appliances and cover Fix the infinitive
apply
it
. Which requires a lot of money. Correct pronoun usage
them
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Therefore
Therefor
, in my opinion,renting is better Correct your spelling
Therefore
then
buying a new Replace the word
than
home
.
On the one hand, the new generation considered renting a home
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because
becouse
it has common Correct your spelling
because
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benefits
benefit
nenefits
and contribute to us the main benefits is that the community can avoid tax payment Correct your spelling
benefits
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because
becouse
it would help to Correct your spelling
because
enhonce
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enhance
people
ʼs economy if buy an
own Change the word
their
home
people
must pay house
and lend tax Change preposition
for house
nevertheless
renting a house
not pressuring the community economy, therefor, people
only have to pay on electricity gas and water billsto
rented Correct your spelling
bills to
bills
home
ʼs furthermore
, another merit is that people
could cahnge
places anytime if they need.Correct your spelling
change
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite