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housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries

#accommodation #countries
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The current global problem is that the supply of buildings is dwindling due to many reasons.
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, in
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 essay, we would like to focus on highlighting the two main reasons. These two reasons are
interest
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rates
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 and
construction
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materials
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. The
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 reason is that
interest
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rates
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 are rising. People usually lend money to buy their house. if
interest
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rates
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 are rising, some citizens can't get back the
interest
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 to the bank. Fed recently raised
interest
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rates
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, and people are cautious to buy their apartments. The National Statistical Office reported that Koreans buying accommodation is diminishing year on year.
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 the more
interest
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rates
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 surge, the more people can't pay off a loan to buy accommodations. The
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 main reason why a living place is lacking is
construction
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materials
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 are expensive more than before. Since Russia invaded Ukraine, wood and titanium were difficult to import from Russia. These things are important for
construction
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. Russia's customs service reported that exporting building
materials
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 diminished by 60%.
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, supplying
materials
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 for
construction
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 is tough currently.
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, I completely agree with the statement about the negative effects occurring from Housing and accommodations.
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 it should be limited to some extent despite taking much time.
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