Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that school
friend
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give more influence
to
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a
child
than
parents
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child
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academy
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success
.
Although
classmates
give good memories and motivation, I believe that
parents
contribute more
on
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the
child
’s
success
. Definitely,
classmates
play a significant role in our school life, as friends could help each other. One of the
examples
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is when
teenager
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does not understand
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the teachers’
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teachers’
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opinion
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opinions
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, he could ask
support
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from his
classmates
.
Moreover
, they can stay after lessons and try to explain a difficult topic
for
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him or her. Despite all
positive
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sides, they can
also
bring bad habits as well.
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, if someone
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for
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cigarettes or alcohol, he can influence others to try it. Others believe that
parents
have more
opportunity
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to
contribution
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to a
child
.
Firstly
,
parents
can give moral
support
and
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advice
advices
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.
Secondly
, they can help financially and teach you many things that you won’t learn at school.
For instance
, a
child
might have some troubles with chemistry and the
parents
might hire a private teacher for their
child
.
Also
,
parents
might
support
and give some advance in hard situations. Overall, I agree that
friend
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and
classmates
have some effect
to
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child’s
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a child’s
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success
, but I do not agree that
parents
play a lesser role. In my experience,
parents
and their
support
play a major role in my academic
success
. I believe that
parents
will understand how they are important to
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child
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and how much power they have.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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