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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
People
 can not help in saving and improving the habitat, and the only one who is impacted by it and can make some
differences
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, are the government and the huge industrial companies. I partially agree with
this
 opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, students are one of the most effective parts of society that can perform enormous works to develop the environment .
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 their parents can encourage them on saving their habitats.
In addition
,
people
 can recycle some of their goods
such
 as plastics, cans, jam glasses and etc.
Furthermore
, they might use cotton bags
instead
 of plastic ones to reduce the usage of
stuffs
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 which are not recyclable.
On the other hand
, Some of the industrial factories which are located out of the town, pour their wastes
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 the rivers and seas.
That is
 the reason
of
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 water
pollutions
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 which
also
 has
an
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 harmful effect on
people
, animals and
marines
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. The
politics
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 should be aware of them and set some heavy fines for
these kind
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 of problems.
Moreover
, the government can manage some campaigns of saving
the
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nature and share it on social
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medias
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, because nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
 are spending their time
by
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 these communication applications
in
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 their mobile phones. So, it would be specifically effective and absolutely end with a successful result. As discussed in the above paragraphs,
i
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 partially agree with the idea that the authorities and the manager of factories are the only ones who can impact on
environment
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, and human beings act no role in saving
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nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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