Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is a matter of debate that a group of people who support adolescents have to be available to do unpaid

work

for the

community

in their leisure

time

. from that perspective younger youth get an advantage as well as the

community

. I strongly support and agree with

this

laid statement. my inclination is argued

further

in the ensuing paragraphs. To commence with support, it can be explained that when younger

children

meet new people who are elder than them

consequently

ideas of thoughts get exchanged with them. That's why career-related and the experience as they gain valuable information which helps in the future. ,

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moreover

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if elderly people

work

in a multinational company, so

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therefore

that group of teens get references for finding a job.

In addition

, the other view to prove my point is that

children

learn

time

management in their life that how all

work

to do on

time

. That's why

that teenagers

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becomes responsible in their family, it will help them. apart from that if a scholar child

help

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poor

children

in the terms of academic

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community

get improved.

For instance

,

last

year my scholar friend went to a rural area and taught all poor

children

throughout

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one year. So eventually all weak students got cleared the board examination due to my friend. So

this

is the way the

community

will develop. Overall, to conclude with the discussion and it can be said that if younger youth do

work

for the

community

without taking any money. So definitely the city can improve and at the same

time

these adolescents gain different experiences, learn communication skills and so on.