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A knowledge of maths is not important for most jobs nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#maths #jobs
Mathematics is one of the important subjects in academic studies.As technology takes place in almost all jobs
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,some people say that
math
 knowledge is not crucial anymore.
However
, I think without not being good at mathematics one cannot excel in his career. It is evident that new inventions like computers, the internet and so on, made everything so easy that individuals do not need to stress much on their brains to do any task.They just need to feed data into the system and the system automatically will give results in a fraction of a second without even a single mistake.
This
 leads some folks to think that one does not need to worry about manual calculations.
For instance
, calculators or computer spreadsheets already have algorithms to solve basic to complex problems. Despite the fact that machines made data processing easy, a person who acquires a good knowledge of
math
 usually performs better than other team members.
This
 happens because a person's critical thinking ability tends to be more and apparently, he or she will be more decisive in nature.The
math
 works for them like a brain exercise.To elaborate, a man who practices solving a complex problem like in
math
 changes the neurological patterns of the brain so it starts working actively
instead
 of passively.
To sum up
,
although
 the use of applied science in office jobs works is way better to improve the quality of work
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having mathematics knowledge handy is a bonus point for a person who would be helpful in professional growth.
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Your essay demonstrates a generally good understanding of the topic. However, ensure that your examples directly support your position on the importance of mathematics in modern jobs.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay needs improvement. Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your position and that your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • omnipresence
  • automation
  • advanced mathematics
  • critical thinking
  • digitalization
  • software tools
  • mathematical literacy
  • personal finance management
  • logical reasoning
  • data analysis
  • mathematical competence
  • complex calculations
  • in-depth
  • broader job market
  • specific fields
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