Governments should spend less money on restoring old buildings and more money for new housing and roads development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of the economy and populations that grow so fast nowadays, more and more old
buildings
are replaced by the new modern style constructions. From my perspective ,I disagree governments should spend less payment on restoring
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property and more cash on new housing and road development while
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think they are both important that should be treated equally. On the one hand, with the crowd population have grown so fast,
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,
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to cost lots of
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all the family have safe and enough space
such
as houses to live in, so that they could bear the unpredictable weather live comfortably.
Secondly
, governments are responsible for providing an efficient transportation network to satisfy the
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need for work or food,
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,
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would able to go out for work and purchase something which is necessary to
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a living on their own.
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should take action, like spending enough
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to protect the ancient
buildings
which symbolize the identity of the local people or even a nation.
Such
as the Forbidden City experiences several empires it is not only obvious evidence of
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historical events, but
also
records the ancient style of architecture which
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definitely definitely
needed to spend lots of
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to make great protection . every time people pass
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by
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by
such
meaningful old
buildings
, it could always
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us where we come from so that
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strengthen strengthen
our identity
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and show us how our ancestors live in the old ages . So in my opinion , some meaningful and safe ancient
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undoubtedlyundoubtly need to put enough
money
for maintenance or restoration by the government while spending lots of
money
on new housing or roads, since the old
buildings
sometimes contain many historical stories and the symbols of the nation which certainly can not be replaced.
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