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Some people think rich countries should help the poor countries by giving money directly. Others believe that there are other more effective forms of international aid. What’s your opinion? Give reasons for tour answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We live in
the
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 era, when, there are plenty of poor
countries
 and wealthy ones as well. Rich
countries
 are able to support others and they definitely should. The question is, should they offer
money
 or try to help differently.? I would like to present my opinion on
this
 topic. Personally, I believe that more developed
countries
 should not help by giving any
money
. From my point of view, it is not the best solution for a few reasons.
Firstly
, the government might use the
money
 in the wrong way,
consequently
, the situation in the country will not improve.
Secondly
, people who would receive donations from the government might spend them in
the
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 irresponsible way.
For example
, in my country, citizens take
the
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money
 from the parliament to support their children.
However
, they do not do it in the reality. They purchase material goods to decorate their houses and travel around the world. As far as I can tell, there is a variety of ways to help others.
For instance
,wealthy
countries
 might provide their poorer neighbours with educational supplies or organise some business workshops to teach them how to improve the social situation.
Furthermore
, providing food resources could be a great form of
the
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international aid.
This
 way, it would be certain that citizens received the needed help. In conclusion, I can tell, that giving funds directly to support others is not the best idea. I would suggest
to think
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 it through and
do
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 everything
what
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that
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 is possible to help by using other resources.
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