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Immigration

has a significant impact on the global and local economies. Each year more and more

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people from

all over the world decide to leave their home country and move to another place. we will examine the reasons and consequences of

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immigration. In my

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the core reason for immigration since the dawn of time is the fundamental desire to live a better

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and a safe future. The modernization of the global transport system has fueled

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and enabled people from all over the world to migrate to new countries. In general, the main reason for

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people migrating

to another country is to run away from areas of conflict and wars to ensure a safe future for their families.

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following the Arab spring, uprising there has been a surge in migration from many countries like Syria, Tunisia, Egypt, Yemen, and more to Europe. More people especially women live under strict regimes that deny them basic rights to seek

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better

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women in Afghanistan under the Taliban would want to migrate to another country where they can continue their education and work.

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migration especially ones caused by war

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puts a huge burden on the host society.

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the integration of the incoming refugees usually requires investment from

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housing and logistical perspective.

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in the long term, the host countries should have a system to integrate them into the job market and ensure they become active citizens rather than a burden

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utilizing the public system and funds. In

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I think that people immigrate to find better

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prospects.

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after immigration can

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like a long journey it may be rewarding.

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Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In modern era, it is easy to sell, buy and work with other people through internet. But others against it. Do you think this is positive trend or negative trend.

Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?