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Some people claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste

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A group of
people
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 said that too much rubbish from homes is not reclaimed , they
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 thought that authorities had to
released
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 new laws to made recycled became necessary.
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 I accept
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 viewpoint,
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I disagree that new rules are the only way to
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 problems.
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 of all , the awareness and responsibility of each person about recycling
is
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 still low , strict laws are needed to force citizens to follow. Recycling costs many times and
efforts
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,
that
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 leads to many
people
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 do not want to do it. According to
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of
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 students at the University of Sydney in 2015, only 5% population is really recovering trash , of which 70% are under 30 years old.
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, a strict principle that makes
people
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 recycle is crucial.
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, governments can do more efforts, not only public law forces humans to recycle. If they just make
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 become necessary, many citizens will not increase their ’s responsibility,
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 willing to pay a fine for not recycling. To avoid
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, authorities should start
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 teaching children how it is important to recycle.
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, laws must oblige large companies to recycle, not only ordinary
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.
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, they should use
money
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 to encourage recyclers,
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, 1000 dollars a month for who has the most rubbish reused in Australia. In conclusion, the law is needed to make more
people
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 reclaim their old stuff, but it is not the only way.
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 of that, how to increasing
people
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’s awareness is way more important.
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