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Some people claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste

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A group of
people
 said that too much rubbish from homes is not reclaimed , they
also
 thought that authorities had to
released
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 new laws to made recycled became necessary.
Although
 I accept
this
 viewpoint,
but
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I disagree that new rules are the only way to
solved
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 problems.
First
 of all , the awareness and responsibility of each person about recycling
is
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 still low , strict laws are needed to force citizens to follow. Recycling costs many times and
efforts
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,
that
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 leads to many
people
 do not want to do it. According to
research
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of
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 students at the University of Sydney in 2015, only 5% population is really recovering trash , of which 70% are under 30 years old.
Thus
, a strict principle that makes
people
 recycle is crucial.
However
, governments can do more efforts, not only public law forces humans to recycle. If they just make
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 become necessary, many citizens will not increase their ’s responsibility,
maybe
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 willing to pay a fine for not recycling. To avoid
this
, authorities should start
with
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 teaching children how it is important to recycle.
Secondly
, laws must oblige large companies to recycle, not only ordinary
people
.
Last
, they should use
money
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 to encourage recyclers,
for instance
, 1000 dollars a month for who has the most rubbish reused in Australia. In conclusion, the law is needed to make more
people
 reclaim their old stuff, but it is not the only way.
Instead
 of that, how to increasing
people
’s awareness is way more important.
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