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Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies.Others, however, think that music can have a negative influences on both.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #music #individuals #societies #influences
Today many people
more
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 than sure that
music
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to
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humans and the public.The advocates of
this
 view argue that
music
 brings
high
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 influence
of
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on
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humans
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 physiology.Others,
however
, disagree
believe
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and believe
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 that the
music
 affected negatively
on
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both. On the one hand, those in favour of listening
music
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to music
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 when
individs
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individuals
individual
 faces
a bad situations
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a bad situation
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.There have valid reasons to
listen
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music
.
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 people tend to
listening
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music
at
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 any
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circumstances
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 it is become to depend on their mood.
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, they prefer to find
suitable
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place
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 for listening variety of
music
.
For instance
,
who
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those who
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is faced
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a
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stressful problem
they
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can
realised
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 with
favourible
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favourable
favourite
 musical which
is depends
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 on that condition.
On the other
hand
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 there
many
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 people who would not argue that the low effects of listening
music
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to music
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.
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Firstly
First
Firsly
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Firstly
 low quality
music
 has
impact
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an impact
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for
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on
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 human behaviour.
Therefore
such
as
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bad types of
music
 should be banned by parents.
Secondly
, there
are
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 another problem which that listen to MP3
maximum
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at maximum
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 volume
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is influenced
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influenced
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 harmfully. In
conclusion
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although
 there are both
of
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sides
is
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completely true for
this
argue
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.I believe that
music
 has withdrawal way from stressed circumstances.
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