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some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. but others think that taking part in individual game is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #part #sports #teams #football #game
Individuals think that it is more
advantages
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 to participate in
games
which
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apply
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played
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are played
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in
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by
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team
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the team
a team
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, like
cricket
. others whilst think that taking
part
 in
Game
 which contain only one person,
such
 as badminton.
In
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This
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this
 should discuss both sides and your
person
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personal
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 point of view.
To begin
 with, some
people
 think that it is more
to
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apply
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beneficial to
part
 in
the
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a
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game
which
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in which
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are
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apply
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team
 members,
such
football
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as football
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.
Firstly
, it
help
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helps
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 to learn
the
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apply
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teamwork together.
In other words
, A
game
 which
contain
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contains
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team
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a team
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 does provide the lesson of teamwork and how to play together in one unit.
For instance
, when I start playing
cricket
, so I play selfish
cricket
 for
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myself
myseft
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myself
, but it does not give benefits. now I learn from
cricket
that
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apply
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how to play as teamwork together.
Moreover
, There are more impact
positive
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positives
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of
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to
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 playing in
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the team
a team
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team
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teams
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such
 as football.
people
 learn that as
team mates
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teammates
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 how to sacrifice your position for others. it is not easy to
do
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apply
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give your place to your
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teammates
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team mates
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teammates
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.
For example
, when I play
cricket
in
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with
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 my cousin , I always
love
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tolove
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do
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apply
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opening, but when I start playing
on
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at
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a nation
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nation
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national
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 level. Used to sacrifice my position for
team
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the team
a team
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 because beneficial.
On the other hand
, some
people
 that taking
part
 in
individual
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an individual
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game
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games
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 is better
such
 as swimming.
secondly
, it
help
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helps
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 to gain your
confidence
 level on the big stages.
In other words
, sports
gives
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give
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 the experience that
does
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one does
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 not have to panic
on
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at
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crucial
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a crucial
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 stage of life.
For instance
, In 1930 Pakistan,
player
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players
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 are effective by the lack of
confidence
, but they start taking
part
 in
individual
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an individual
the individual
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game
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games
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. it
help
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helps
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 them to gain
confidence
.
furthermore
, I would like to outline one more major impact of playing individual
games
. it will
also
 develop their communication skill with different
people
.
In other words
, it
give
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gives
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 benefits
in
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apply
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daily
for
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apply
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talking to different
people
.
Lastly
, some
people
 think that it is more beneficial participate to
games
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in games
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 which are played in
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the game
a game
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game
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games
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such
 as football but
other
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others
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 believe that it is ideal to take
part
 in
individual
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the individual
an individual
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game
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games
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such
 as swimming. In my opinion, Individuals
games
 are more beneficial rather than
team
games
 because
it
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they
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 help us to gain
the
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apply
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confidence
 level and develop
the
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apply
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communication skills.
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