some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. but others think that taking part in individual game is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Individuals think that it is more
advantages
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to participate in
games
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which
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played
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are played
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in
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by
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team
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the team
a team
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, like
cricket
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. others whilst think that taking
part
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in
Game
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which contain only one person,
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as badminton.
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this
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should discuss both sides and your
person
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point of view.
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with, some
people
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think that it is more
to
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apply
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beneficial to
part
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in
the
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a
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game
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which
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in which
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are
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apply
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team
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members,
such
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football
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as football
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.
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, it
help
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to learn
the
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teamwork together.
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, A
game
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which
contain
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contains
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team
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a team
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does provide the lesson of teamwork and how to play together in one unit.
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, when I start playing
cricket
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, so I play selfish
cricket
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for
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myself
myseft
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myself
, but it does not give benefits. now I learn from
cricket
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that
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apply
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how to play as teamwork together.
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, There are more impact
positive
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positives
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of
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to
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playing in
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the team
a team
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team
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teams
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such
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as football.
people
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learn that as
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team mates
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teammates
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how to sacrifice your position for others. it is not easy to
do
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apply
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give your place to your
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teammates
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team mates
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teammates
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.
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, when I play
cricket
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in
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with
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my cousin , I always
love
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do
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opening, but when I start playing
on
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at
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a nation
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nation
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national
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level. Used to sacrifice my position for
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team
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the team
a team
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because beneficial.
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, some
people
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that taking
part
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in
individual
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an individual
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game
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games
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is better
such
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as swimming.
secondly
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, it
help
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helps
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to gain your
confidence
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level on the big stages.
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, sports
gives
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give
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the experience that
does
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one does
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not have to panic
on
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at
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crucial
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a crucial
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stage of life.
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, In 1930 Pakistan,
player
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players
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are effective by the lack of
confidence
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, but they start taking
part
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in
individual
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an individual
the individual
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game
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games
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. it
help
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helps
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them to gain
confidence
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.
furthermore
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, I would like to outline one more major impact of playing individual
games
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. it will
also
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develop their communication skill with different
people
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.
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, it
give
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gives
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benefits
in
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apply
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daily
for
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apply
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talking to different
people
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.
Lastly
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, some
people
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think that it is more beneficial participate to
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games
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in games
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which are played in
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the game
a game
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game
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games
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such
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as football but
other
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others
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believe that it is ideal to take
part
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in
individual
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the individual
an individual
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game
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games
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such
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as swimming. In my opinion, Individuals
games
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are more beneficial rather than
team
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games
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because
it
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they
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help us to gain
the
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apply
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confidence
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level and develop
the
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apply
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communication skills.
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