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Some high school students work part-time in addition to going to school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In the modern world, the number of
students
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 looking for part-time jobs is increasing. We can all agree that a part-time
job
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 can affect
teenagers
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 positively and negatively.
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 phenomenon and the solutions. The benefits of doing a part-time
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 are not difficult to see. Some
teenagers
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 are already doing part-time jobs and earning their pocket
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 themselves. It can be helpful to learn how to earn
money
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 before they get a
job
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. I believe that
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 is a good opportunity for
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, and they can gain a lot of knowledge
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 as working in a team and how the company works inside.
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, they can learn earning
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 is how much difficult without their parents’ support. These are part of education for the
students
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. Academics is not the only important education for teenager’s education.
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, there is still no denying that doing a part-time
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 by
teenagers
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 has its own drawbacks.
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, if
students
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 do a part-time
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instead
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 of studying, they cannot follow their school classes because they do not have time to study.
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,
students
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’ grades begin to suffer, they do less homework, and they are more likely to drop out.
Teenagers
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 have to focus on their own work, and I recommend that they work after graduation. In conclusion,
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, it is true that learning how to earn
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 can be helpful before they join a company. As has been discussed above, the negative points associated with doing a part-time
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 for
teenagers
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 outweigh its merits.

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