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Q. In most of socities, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of these difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

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A parent has a significant role in
child's
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a child's
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 development. Different
community
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communities
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 of society consider
role
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the role
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 of
father
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 and
mother
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 distinctly as both have their own responsibilities to fulfil. I am explaining it in
following
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the following
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 passages. In most of the
countries
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,countries
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father
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 is considered as
earner
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an earner
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 of bread and butter while
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mother
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the mother
a mother
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 has to take care of home chores as a housemaker. These responsibilities
has
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 been defined
from
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by
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 our ancestors.
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this
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 is
a
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the
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 main cause of their different roles.
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Furthermore
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 another cause of
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distinction
distintion
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distinction
 is
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mother
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the mother
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 has to
spent
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spend
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 more time with kids as
compare
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compared
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 to
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father
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the father
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. A
mother
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 can define
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a child's
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child's
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children
child
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 better than a
father
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.
Therefore
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 kids may
also
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 feel more comfortable and affectionate with
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their mother
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mother
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mothers
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 and it helps in their physical and emotional development positively. It may be another reason
of
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for
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dissimilar
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the dissimilar
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 roles of
parents
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.
Above
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The above
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 reasons clearly show the different roles of
parents
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 in
majority
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the majority
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 of communities.
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However
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 the role of
parents
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 is going to
a
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apply
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deliberately change in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 days as nowadays
parents
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 have more concentration towards their carrier or professional life as
compare
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compared
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 to home affairs
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