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Many people believe that there is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and lackof respect for others.What are the causes and suggest solutions?

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It is simply seen that many
people
 show blatant disrespect to others as well as condemn a social system on purpose. There are some factors that lead to
this
 problem and some solutions should be suggested to deal with it.
To begin
 with, the
internet
 plays a significant role in
this
 issue.
First
 and foremost, an increase in the use of the
internet
 and social media should be considered. Since the
internet
 easily provides anonymity,
people
 can argue over and say whatever they think. The fact that
people
 can freely discuss at all is great.
However
, more
people
 make hate speeches out of sheer spite with their personal information hidden and unknown.
In addition
, modern
people
 are exposed to much more
stress
 than in the past. The anger they keep inside is another factor that causes
this
 disrespectful community.
For example
, social pressure gives individuals enormous
stress
 and they let it out on the
internet
, which they would not do for their social status in the reality.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 solutions to cope with
this
 phenomenon.
Firstly
, there should be activities in which the crowd can get involved to relieve
stress
.
For instance
, sports
such
 as cycling can efficiently reduce
stress
 levels without competition as well as rise
people
's
stress
 capacity. In order to encourage the public to go cycling, infrastructure should be available.
Secondly
, a real-name system might have to be accepted lest the public should merely make hate speeches without thinking deeply enough.
This
 may seem to preclude citizens from communicating.
However
, it certainly protects innocent individuals who are targeted by anti-social behaviours or cyber violence.  To conclude, despite the fact that
people
 have gotten more resentful these days, it should be handled for public justice under which all
people
 can live together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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