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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence.

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Nowadays public debate has been going on over whether a
person
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's
culture
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 is defined by their
country
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 of
origin
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. Some people agree and think that the
culture
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 in which a
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 has been born
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is his for the entirety of his life.
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, others believe that due to today's way of communication - social media, a
person
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's
culture
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 is only slightly influenced by the
country
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 human has been born in,
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 is a
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's
choice
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.
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, people believe that
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's
culture
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 is heavily influenced by their homeland because usually, that's the
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 of their parents and grandparents.
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 it is common to see counties' influence on a young, developing child.
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, if it is usual in the
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 of a
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's
origin
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 to speak
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 language, and celebrate particular holidays which are common for that region, the child will embrace those
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 and
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 will be part of his
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, part of his identity.
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, the homeland's influence is seen in human's
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 of
food
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. Traditional cuisine is tied to the region and
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,
thus
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 in
one
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person
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's
culture
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, you can see his
origin
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 by
choice
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 of
food
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, because no matter where a
person
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 sets to live, comfort
food
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 usually becomes the
food
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 you ate when being a child.
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, the way and place where human
being
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 was brought up
has
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 a great deal to
his
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their
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culture
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.
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, in today's world where it is hard to point out what is from
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culture
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 and what is from another, a
person
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's
culture
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 becomes solely his own
choice
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. Social media has given every
one
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 of us the ability to see and follow different
traditions
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 of the world.
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, a
person
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's
culture
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 is less likely to be influenced by the
country
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 of
origin
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, younger people these days tend to celebrate Halloween. Though in my
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this
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 time is intended to mourn and remember the dead ones. Younger generations choose to follow new
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,
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 changing the common
culture
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 of a
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 born in my homeland.
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 of the wide use of social media, today's
person
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's
culture
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 is more likely to be influenced by a popular personality's
culture
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 rather than the
person
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's
country
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 of
origin
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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