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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of higher school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes
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It has been noticed that a few individuals have a notion that volunteer
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 should be mandatory in the school's curriculums. I strongly opine for
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 viewpoint. My preference is justified with valid reasons and appropriate examples.
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 with, the primary argument to encourage higher trainees to join social
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 is that they can get exposure to the world. By participating in various charity
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, they can have a chance to organize events for themselves.
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 could create an ample amount of opportunities for pupils to be more social.
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, they can improve their interpersonal skills.
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 hosting an event they may get a chance to interact with the people, to speak in public.
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 in students
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 confident, which helps them later in their professional careers.
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, if students are forced to join like services, they can get to know about their responsibilities toward the nation. By joining
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 activities as growing a plant, cleaning the trash from a nearby campus area, or educating juniors about games and sports, they know the tasks that general citizen has towards their country.
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 may lead to the establishment of more aware generations and citizens. To illustrate
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, Gujarat has the most educated society, and people know all their duties toward the state.
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, they can feel the satisfaction of helping.
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, society works harmoniously.
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, motivating the children at schools to be a part of community services is a great idea and
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 why it must be compulsory.
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 can assist them to enhance their communication skills and the nation will
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 smoothly.
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