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Writing Samples
Band 6

You have heard that one of your friends will be doing voluntary work at a festival. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ask about what type of festival your friend is volunteering at and when and where it will take place ask what your friend will have to do as part of the voluntary work ask if the organisers are still looking for more volunteers and how you can apply for the work

Dear Pat, I hope that you are doing well, I hear that you will be doing voluntary
work
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 at a festival,
that is
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 quite impressive, you always have been the kind of person that helps everyone. I am wondering about what type of festival it will be, maybe a music or dance festival. will it take place in our university, if not let me know where and when. What you have to do as part of
this
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 voluntary
work
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, remember that you are not the kind of person that likes hard
work
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 or spending time in the sun, I occasionally remember when we used to be kind and I tease you about how peaky you are. By the way, I am
also
Linking Words
 considering the option of
enrol
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enrolling
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me
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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as a volunteer. are you still looking for more people?
,
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apply
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 please help me,
i
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I
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 really want to apply for the
work
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,
this
Linking Words
 can help me with my resume and
also
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 spending time with you, as the old time's sake. Best regards, your friend Erick.

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task achievement
Make sure to ask questions that are clear and easy to understand. This helps your friend know what you want to know.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more clear structure by starting a new paragraph for each new idea. This helps with reading.
task achievement
Make sure to use a friendly tone but avoid teasing too much, as it can be misunderstood. Keep the tone supportive.
greeting and closing
You have a warm greeting and closing, making your letter friendly and polite.
complete response
You have included questions about the festival and volunteering, which shows great involvement and interest.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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