Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us more about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
modern and digital era, we are more associated
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technology
and mostly mobile devices like phones , tablets and laptops . Using these devices brings
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lot
of opportunities to advertise. These advertisements come with their positive and negative points, I will discuss my views on the good and bad effects of ads.
Firstly
, let us discuss that viewing
lot
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of promotions about the
products
that really are not important . We are stuck in the web of materialised marketing.
Due to
appealing offers and attractive so-called ",benefits
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" people often buy
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lot
of needless
products
. Buying these unnecessary goods increases
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financial burden on the personnel .
Further
to
this
, it is
also
a waste of money, time and resources that ultimately impacts our environment.
For example
,
the
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mobile phone with a fan . It is marketed in the name of
technology
however
it was completely impractical and useless. On the other side, some
products
are a life changer . Considering,
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lot
of marketing and media agencies are using Artificial Intelligence based
technology
to place promotions and ads.
While
using the internet , people came to know that
technology
and
product
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products
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make their
life
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lives
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so easy and comfortable.
For example
, seeing an ad for an electric chair for disabled/handicapped persons with improved functionality might help
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lot
of specially-abled persons. Another example would be a cooker cum fryer for
kitchen
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, it can solve and address many
travellers
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travellers'
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problems. Hereby I have discussed my opinions based upon my experience and knowledge. I would say using AI and
technology
ads can make a big impact on a life of humans. On the other side if promotions and
products
are not properly placed and evaluated before marketing it makes a loss of people's money and time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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