There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: Say what would you do differently than last year Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.
Dear team,
I hope
this
message finds you all well! We're getting ready for our annual work party
next month, so I wanted to talk about how we're planning it and give you some ideas for how to make it even better this
year
.
When I think back on last
year
's party
, I think we could improve it by adding more interactive games. We could, for example
, set up team games or a talent show to get more people involved and make the event more interesting. I also
think that giving people a wider range of food choices would accommodate their tastes and dietary needs.
Last
year
, on the other hand
, the venue was lovely, but the room felt a bit squished at times, which made the party
less comfortable and fun overall
. We would like to find a place to talk to each other and enjoy the party
without being rushed or busy.
I think we should start making plans this
Thursday at 3 p.m. in the meeting room. We can brainstorm together and divide up the work to ensure everything goes smoothly.
I'm excited to hear what you have to say and work with you to make this
year
's party
one to remember!
Best Regards,
Trang DaoSubmitted by minhtrang.dao on
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the differences you propose compared to last year. Providing specific examples can enhance your response.
coherence cohesion
Consider using linking words and phrases to enhance the flow between ideas.
task achievement
The letter includes a warm greeting and a polite closing, which suits the context well.
task achievement
The letter is organized and addresses all the required points.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph contains a single main idea, enhancing clarity.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite