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In many countries, the quality of life in the large cities is becoming worse. What causes this problem? What measure can be taken to solve it?

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Nowadays many big
cities
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 in different parts of the world are facing worse situations.there are a number of causes of
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 problem like excessive migration of rural population to urban areas,and high crime rates.,but,
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 situation can be tackled in many ways which will be discussed later in the essay.
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 with,developed
cities
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 are facing a life crisis these days,
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, due to too many village folks settling into
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,
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,people migrate in order to have good education and lifestyle for their children which they cannot get in their hometown which is causing congestion and
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 are not very well prepared for it..
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 ,unfortunately, our
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 are not well prepared to handle that much number of human beings and it can give rise to criminal activities,
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,there are no jobs provided by the government
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 an enormous amount of people are unemployed,
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, causing street crimes , and increasing the rates of illiteracy.
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,certain measures can be taken to improve
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 ongoing issue,
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 as authorities should come forward and building more and more houses for the migrated people with good facilities,
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, jobs should be offered to those who are not so educated in order to decrease criminal activities.,
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,education should be provided and more schools should be established in order to raise literacy rate. In conclusion,
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 are becoming more crowded due to too many communities from other areas and they are not very well prepared for it but with some strategies and brainstorming
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 situation can be solved by, constructing more apartments and providing jobs and education to individuals.
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