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36.Although there is a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some contend that despite the availability of
translation
 software, acquiring a
language
 could be generally more favourable. Personally, I am inclined to agree with
this
 notion. On the one hand, it is undeniable that
translation
 tools reduce the communication barriers between individuals regardless of their linguistic backgrounds.
For example
, Google Translate, one of the most popular
translation
 applications, are able to generate high-quality translations thanks to its advancements in complex linguistic algorithms.
Therefore
, people who now travel overseas can have basic conversations with local people by simply installing
this
 application on their smartphones. Before the invention of these tools, travellers had to participate in some short-term
language
 courses prior to the travelling date or hire a tour guide who had good
language
 skills.
This
 could consume a lot of time and money.
Thus
, the introduction of
translation
 software is a nature of great help.
On the other hand
, I do believe that acquiring a new
language
 can bring numerous benefits to humans.
Firstly
, they are exposed to new and diverse cultures. As
language
 is a defining characteristic of a nation's culture, learners can
subsequently
 acquire a better understanding of how citizens of different countries communicate with others and how their society functions culturally.
This
 exposure may foster cultural awareness and tolerance of people, preparing them for the interconnected and culturally diverse worth.
Secondly
, learning foreign a
language
 can offer better employment prospects. To be more specific, it has been observed that employers nowadays choose qualified candidates not only based on their academic performance but
also
 their
language
 skills.
This
 recruitment criteria indicates that individuals who can speak more than one
language
 can have more advantage in the highly competitive human capital market. In conclusion,
while
translation
 applications can improve communication between individuals to a certain extent, I firmly assert that learning a foreign
language
 could be advantageous because it not only enriches learners' understanding of diverse cultures but
also
 provides them with better job opportunities.
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Task Achievement
Your essay effectively addressed the task response, providing your opinion and justifying it with reasoned arguments, it significantly meets all parts of the task demand, but could have provided a slightly more thorough insight into the question.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your usage of cohesion in terms of paragraphing and linking is excellent, and you demonstrate an effective use of a range of cohesive devices. However, your logical argumentation could be enhanced by fluid transition of ideas.
Lexical Resource
You show a wide range of vocabulary in your essay, but be cautious about using words appropriately to stretch your vocabulary. Misuse of a word can hamper the precise and logical delivery of your opinions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
You demonstrated an impressive range of grammatical structures, though occasionally there may be minor errors. Strive for accuracy in your grammar.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Appreciation
  • Cognitive Flexibility
  • Idiomatic Expressions
  • Career Advancement
  • Multilingual
  • Proficiency
  • Empathy
  • Cultural Barriers
  • Native Speaker Fluency
  • Colloquialisms
  • Language Acquisition
  • Immersive Experience
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