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Some people believe that car free days are affective ways to reduce air population. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion .

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Today more and more
community
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communities
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 feel that designed
car-free
days
 are successful ways to bring
air
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the air
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population
. The advocates of
this
 view argue that
cars
 should be few to reduce
air
population
. Others,
however
, disagree and
believes
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believe
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 that there are alternative ways that are more and more effective. On the one hand, those in favour of keeping clearness
air
pulopulation
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population
, because most of the
people
 feel better in the fresh
air
.
This
 has valid reasons to be concerned about
air
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the air
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population
.
For instance
,
because
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many countries have tremendous factories and different automobiles. The
air
population
 is not always good. But many countrysides
than
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have a cleaner
air
population
 than cities. The reason for
this
 is there aren't many factories and station
wagon
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wagons
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. That's why the
air
 here is clean. ,
Furthermore
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 there don't industry extra gases and hazardous substances and everything is natural. In my view
also
 other countries decrease pollutants and the laws existing in the country need to be aimed at
car-free
days
 and improving safeguard the
air
population
.
On the other hand
, there are many
people
 who would argue that the
car-free
days
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day's
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 damage not only the
air
population
,
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 but
also
people
.
For instance
,
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a variety
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variety
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various
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 type of
cars
 relieves our lives.
Therefore
, others disagree and believe that don't need to
car-free
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have car-free
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days
. Indeed,we need to somewhere urgent situation to
cars
.
For example
, when
people
 want to go
to
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abroad or hospital long distances they need to
car
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the car
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. But now different types of
cars
 are producing
and
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more gas which is harmful to health and
air
. In conclusion,
although
 the hazardous for
air
population
besides
 our health. There is a need for
the
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car-free
days
 to be regulated by introducing strict politics. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 both sides are correct.
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