Most people these days prefer getting news online to reading newspapers or watching TV. Do you think it is a positive development?

As
it
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can be clearly seen, technology is developing day by day.
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why
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people read the
news
they need in two different ways,
one
is from
newspapers
and the other is from
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. In
this
essay, it will be considered which
one
a positive with examples. On the
one
hand, due to the development of technology most people do not
use
newspapers
and
one
of the advantages of
newspapers
is that it is convenient for the elderly because most of the elderly cannot
use
the
Internet
.
For instance
, my grandmother reads daily
news
from
newspapers
and magazines
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ever
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day.
However
,
one
of the disadvantages of
this
is that it can be damaged
for
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the environment because they become useless after
use
and
thrown
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away and
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pollution.
On the other hand
, almost 80
percent
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of the population,
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espacially
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especially
, the young generations,
use
the
Internet
and it is a good
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ever
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way, not only read
news
but
also
online
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shopping,
learning
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knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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and other.
Besides
, if we
use
the
Internet
a lot, we have a good chance to change our
career
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.
Nevertheless
, online
news
and
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TV for a longer time will negatively
affects
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health.
For example
, eyesight and back or neck pain. Despite
this
, these days, everyone has a mobile phone and is connected to the
Internet
. In conclusion,
although
both of them have benefits and negatives, I personally believe that, if we
use
whichever
one
we prefer, that will be effective for us.
In addition
, their
use
accelerates development.
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