Many children these days have their own mobile phones what are the advantages and disadvantage of it

Nowadays,each
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have a mobile
phone
.The following paragraphs discuss whether
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or disadvantages and reach a reasonable conclusion. nowadays it is very difficult to live without a
phone
.
However
,it is great that
children's
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have phones because you can control who
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yourself
child
.
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for example
,where is he walking and
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whats
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is he doing. Your child went to study with friends and you can know what they are doing
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else
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as
almost teachers give extracurricular homework online. It is good for your child so
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phone
use
it
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is not bad. To put it simply there are many advantages to using their
phone
.
On the other
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If you donʼt control
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, they can unknowingly get caught up in
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they donʼt know about
for example
you may know what "
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Instagram
" program
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This
app has been available for a long time.
such
apps will
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damage
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damage
your
childʼs
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child's
mind so you must care. In conclusion, I agree with the advantages of
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mobile phones because
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you may
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complete
your defect and you may use the
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benefits
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benefits
of smartphones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emergencies
  • enhance learning
  • educational apps
  • monitoring
  • digital skills
  • distraction
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social development
  • physical health problems
  • inappropriate content
  • prolonged use
  • eye strain
  • sleep disturbances
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