Many people believe that education standards have declined in recent times. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

Education as one of the most important
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of a developed society
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has been currently put in a discussion by a lot of people that whether there's a reduction in its standards level or not.
This
phenomenon can be declared by some causes and
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the end probably be solved with a few suggested solutions.
To begin
with, nowadays it's
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getting
geting
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getting
more and more easy
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to go to
the
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university as the number of universities has had a growth and
as a
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the difficulties of long distance, high fees,
immigrations
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and so on is no
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. More people can get a
college
certification and
this
lead to the situation where graduates' capacities
accurecy
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accuracy
is not clear anymore.
Furthermore
, we see within some societies that being a student is not for the pure science as it used to be,
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for being smoothly employed in the future, so colleges go much
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on
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entrance
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exams and pass the students. To cope with the problems expressed above, some solutions can be taken.
First
, universities should take more standards and fair
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exams to examine the accurate level of students' ability, which leads to
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university's
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ranking among others.
Second
, we should undertake policies that give a more
efficiant
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way, other than
college
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degree, for corporates to
emplye
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employee
. It can get students
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to go to
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college
just to learn science and
also
alternative options rather than
college
to learn other necessary skills. Being
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aware
awar
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aware
of the education importance, we shall take steps to improve
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standards of it. We'd better
to
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rethink
of
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our
study's
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value as a student, and the reason we choose a subject or a
college
in order to do our best at that and
then
make the education standard
to
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rise.
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