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A lot of money is spent on repairing old building. Instead of repairing old building that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Construction and renovation are very common nowadays unlike they used to be in the past centuries. A huge amount of
money
 is spent on renovating old structured
buildings
.
Instead
 of renovation of old
buildings
 that amount of
money
 should be spent on constructing new
buildings
.
This
 essay will discuss why constructing new
buildings
 is a better option than a building to be repaired. On the
one
 hand, Some people prefer to repair the building
instead
 of totally demolishing the old
one
 and making a new
one
. And there can be several reasons for that,
such
 as lack of
money
 can be
one
 of the major factors, and
secondly
, building a new
structure
 requires an enormous amount of time. So these are the two main factors that let people opt to renovate or repair the
structure
.
For instance
, if a building is newly constructed in the 1990s, so it must be repaired
instead
 of knocking it down because 30 years for construction can still be considered very less.
on the other hand
, some people believe that spending on old architecture is useless and that should be demolished and opt for building a new
structure
. there can be several reasons for the demolition of an old
structure
,
for example
, if the building is very old and in a dangerous situation which can lead to some serious consequences
then
 despite the shortage of cash a person might think about constructing it again
instead
 of renovating it. In conclusion, I would personally take a detailed look at the building, if it is in critical condition
then
 I believe that
this
 building should be constructed again
instead
 of renovating it.
Otherwise
 spending cash on a building
that is
 in a fairly better condition will be a waste of
money
.
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