With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Today, more and more senior

people

need to be

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care

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society

as

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improvements are made in health

care

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Rising

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population of elderly globally becomes a serious issue which

examine

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if we are capable to deal with them. From my viewpoint, I firmly believe that we have the ability to take

care

of old

people

with resources in

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society

and I will discuss my points below. In most developed countries, there are more senior

population

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in their

society

than

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infants. It means that in those countries a youth should take

care

of several elderly

people

at the same time. While the power of an individual is limited, the power of

society

seems to be abundant because

of

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the

state of the art

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technologies today help to maintain old

peoples'

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people's

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lives and keep them living longer than before. As the result, an increasing number of seniors is a tricky problem we need to face,

in particular

the advanced economies. To deal with

this

issue, a holistic development of

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health

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healthcare

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care

system should be taken into account

of

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statesmen.

First

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they need to establish communication between elderly

people

and medical institutions

such

as local

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clinics

clincs

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clinics

or hospitals in their

neighborhoods

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.

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a real-time reporting system to monitor their health conditions, if some accidents

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occurred

occur

occured

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occur

to them, members

in

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community

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can contribute

themselves

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to cope with the issues. What's more, nursing homes

they

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should provide medical and mental

cares

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to seniors as they may feel lonely after

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the move

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move

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into

nursing

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a nursing

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house.

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, holding activities can give them a sense of belonging and increase their willingness to integrate

in

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the new environment.

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citizens should shape an

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elderly-friendly

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elderly friendly

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environment by facilitating them with sufficient

equipments

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so that they can really enjoy their lives in

this

community. In summary, to cope with seniority

society

, we should prepare ourselves to face the issue and develop solutions to help them overcome difficulties with the power of

society

.