Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
To improve
Fix the infinitive
Improve
the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
sports
can play a vital role. It is said that “Health
mind is a healthy body”. So, people believe Correct article usage
A health
plethora
amount of Correct article usage
a plethora
sports
activity
can improve public Fix the agreement mistake
activities
health
, and this
way
would be better
option. Add an article
a better
the better
However
, some people say that sports
alone would not effective way
for
Change preposition
to
improve
Change the verb form
improving
health
, and also
need others
facilities. From my perspective, I will mostly agree with Correct pronoun usage
other
this
statement by following two reasons that are given in below.
On the hand, people’s
Change noun form
people
belief
that lots of Replace the word
believe
sports
facility
significantly improve Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
condition and make fit. For example
, Country like INDIA, most of
Change preposition
apply
youngsters
influence Add an article
the youngsters
sports
Change preposition
by sports
advertisement
and desire to involve in Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
sports
Add an article
the sports
activity
. From different data research, it will find that Fix the agreement mistake
activities
who
play any Correct pronoun usage
those who
sports
activity
they
are more live as compared with Correct pronoun usage
apply
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
does
not play/involve Correct subject-verb agreement
do
any
kind of Change preposition
in any
sports
.
On contriver, some people say that not only sports
activity
would have improved the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
, apart from this
, we
need another measure to live Add the word(s)
but we also
healthy
whereas must maintain Change the word
healthily
diet
, physical Add an article
a diet
the diet
activity
and mundane lifestyle work and another lot of works
that contribute Fix the agreement mistake
work
in
Change preposition
to
this
. For example
, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
gym lovers, Correct article usage
apply
they
take steroids and pills to gain muscle size and they think it would be Correct pronoun usage
apply
better
Add an article
a better
way
for
Change preposition
to
health
but they did not know they are increasing muscle size Correct pronoun usage
their health
but
in Correct word choice
apply
unhealthy
Change the article
an unhealthy
way
. So, it is not necessary, we only focus on sports
, despite, we should think about diet and what are we taking?
From my perspective, Sports
activity
would improve health
problem
but it is not necessarily only Fix the agreement mistake
problems
plethora
Correct article usage
a plethora
Change preposition
of type
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
sports
would
Correct pronoun usage
that would
better
Add a missing verb
be better
way
, this
option only contributes part of health
improvement, whereas, lot
of factors depend for Change the article
a lot
improve
Change the verb form
improving
health
issues.
To conclude, plenty of games/sports
activity
along with others
physical Correct quantifier usage
other
activity
would be effective
strategy for Add an article
an effective
enhance
Wrong verb form
enhancing
person’s
life and Correct article usage
a person’s
maintain
their Wrong verb form
maintaining
health
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