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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

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The world is an enormous
food
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 web which if tampered with can have dire consequences. Globally, rain forests as well as many other habitats provide a home, a continuous supply of
food
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 and a safe place for a vast number of organisms. I believe that cutting down
trees
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 is a catastrophe and may well lead to an imbalance of the animal
food
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 chain and decrease the supply of
oxygen
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 for human demand eventually resulting in the extinction of all species.
Firstly
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, chopping down
trees
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 in the rainforest can eradicate the homes of multiple organisms.
Animals
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 reside in these locations that they call home. For ,example
animals
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 use the forests for finding
food
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 , and building their homes as birds build their nests. Ultimately,
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 can have a knock-on effect on the
food
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 chain as a lack of one consumer can lead to an imbalance throughout having a domino effect eventually leading to the extinction of certain
animals
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.
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 we must preserve these habitats
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, humans rely on
trees
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 and other producers to provide plenty of clean
oxygen
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.
For example
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, Logging can lead to chopping down
trees
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 on a large scale which carries out photosynthesis to provide us with a humongous continuous
oxygen
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 supply.
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 will mean people with respiratory diseases will undoubtedly have decreased chances of survival as well as children and the elderly, inevitably depleting our
oxygen
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 supplies and leading to extinction. To conclude,
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 believe we must conserve our
trees
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 and greenery in order to provide homes and
food
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 for our
animals
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 as well as
oxygen
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 to humans.
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 we must provide adequate care for our rainforests in order to protect them so in the long ,run they may protect us humans as well as
animals
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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