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Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, most
parents
 are concerned about their
children
's education.
However
, whether
parents
 should prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
 or give them the freedom to make
mistakes
 becomes a hot topic. My view is that
parents
 should give
children
 enough space so they can try something that they want. It is obvious that
children
 can benefit from
mistakes
 and learn the correct way to resolve them. If
parents
 always prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
, they can not obtain the ability to face and solve problems.
Parents
 must allow them their make
mistakes
.
However
, guiding
children
 is better than preventing them, and overprotecting
children
 can stifle their nature and creativity.
For
example
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 my
parents
 always let me try something new
,
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 and encourage me to learn from
mistakes
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. Giving
children
 complete freedom is not a good way. Some unacceptable
mistakes
 can destroy
children
's lives,
for instance
, dragging, stealing, and some think like that. Keeping
children
 away from those things is necessary for
parents
. But In sum,
parents
 should encourage
children
 to try something new and not be
warry
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worry
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 about the
mistakes
 which their
children
 could make. At the same time, it is necessary to notice the potential of crime. Balancing them is a challenging but necessary thing for
parents
.
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