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"The Doomsday will not come until the Arab lands will be not covered by verdure, where rivers flow." While the world is shocked by the

desert

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shots, some people still have not heard

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informed

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awarded

aware

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aware

what

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happened

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happened

there. These images, which were spread on the Internet, raised

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took up

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issues; How

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water burst

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gush in the middle of the

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and

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captured

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swallowed all around? Could

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prophesied would happen in the

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deserts on the Day of Judgment? Almost everyone suspected

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could be the sign

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clue for the end of the world

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. Let’s review the

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and investigate everything in detail

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meticulously (while we

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). August of 2022 –

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social media was appalled by shots, which assumed were made in the

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. Within a short period,

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occasion was

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sensation not only in

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social media platforms. Some individuals claimed that it was fake

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fabricated,

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and others

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(stated) old-of-date

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outdated

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shots, which were made

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taken

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of years ago.

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, other parts of communities said that these (images) were made in

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, even some were sure that there is nothing unusual and

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kind of natural

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is absolutely normal for

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, the fact that Prophet Muhammad warned mankind about

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day about 1400 years ago, was

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critical detail, which drew

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of people’s attention

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consideration. Definitely, only God knows everything (only God omniscient) and time will lead humanity to the truth.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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244 words

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