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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends. Others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #show #care #friends #appreciation
"The Doomsday will not come until the Arab lands will be not covered by verdure, where rivers flow." While the world is shocked by the
desert
 shots, some people still have not heard
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informed
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awarded
aware
awared
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aware
what
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happened
hapenned
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happened
 there. These images, which were spread on the Internet, raised
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took up
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two questions
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issues; How
the
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 water burst
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gush in the middle of the
desert
 and
covered
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captured
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swallowed all around? Could
this
 fact be what Prophet Muhammad said
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prophesied would happen in the
Arabian
 deserts on the Day of Judgment? Almost everyone suspected
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was sure that
this
 could be the sign
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clue for the end of the world
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apochalipsis
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apocalypses
. Let’s review the
desert
 and investigate everything in detail
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meticulously (while we
there
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). August of 2022 –
the
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social media was appalled by shots, which assumed were made in the
Arabian
desert
. Within a short period,
this
 event
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occasion was
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 sensation not only in
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Google trends
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 but
also
in
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 social media platforms. Some individuals claimed that it was fake
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fabricated,
others
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and others
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 (stated) old-of-date
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outdated
footages
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shots, which were made
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taken
couple
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 of years ago.
However
, other parts of communities said that these (images) were made in
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desert
, even some were sure that there is nothing unusual and
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 kind of natural
events
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 is absolutely normal for
Arabian
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desert
.
However
, the fact that Prophet Muhammad warned mankind about
this
 day about 1400 years ago, was
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 critical detail, which drew
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 of people’s attention
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consideration. Definitely, only God knows everything (only God omniscient) and time will lead humanity to the truth.
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