You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request a change in my accommodation

room

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also

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to notify

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you on

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the problems that I am facing during my stay. I live in

"Floral"

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the "Floral"

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building,

room

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number 252. I am a research student and my work mainly consists of

hands-on

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the hands-on

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project

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after my college hours. My roommate is

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an art's

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art's

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student who mainly deals with

culture

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arts for various programs. Not only he practices in the

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which creates quite a lot of disturbance for me but

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there are many of his friends

coming

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to the

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when I work on my projects.

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, he plays instruments which cause loud noise and it is so disruptive that it affects my concentration in my work and it takes more time than required to finish my test results. I would to have a single bedroom for myself, which can help me in my studies. If there are any extra costs required, you can let me know and I will pay the same. I am looking forward to your positive reply. Yours faithfully,

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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