More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending a short time doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses for communities in poorer countries. Why people choose to do so? Who will benefit more: young people or the communities?

Evidence shows there are manifold youngsters from rich communities who become volunteers to do some activities as
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temporary
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without getting paid.
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, they tend to build houses ,
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some difficult subjects
such
as math to pupils who live in financially weak societies. There are several reasons for these matters. In
this
essay, not only will I write about real causes but
also
we will find out to what extent there are advantages to both sides.
To begin
with, the most essential reason is young people enjoy being useful and effective.
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, when adolescents leave school, looking for something satisfaction,
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teen-agers
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are considered to do something varying from regular activities. Many of them rather
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a volunteer
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volunteer
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to do free careers. Take joining music clubs which perform for children suffering from illnesses like cancer
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free as an example; young individuals
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experience
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these kind
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of
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occupations
occupation
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their perspective on
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but
also
they learn how to work in a team and communicate with other people. On the other side, the administrators in poor countries utilize candidates to do countless
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as building schools, working in
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hospitals and teaching children ,etc.
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hand, the employer does not have to
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of financial processes.
On the other hand
, their
projects
going to finish early ,since the energy and eagerness of young ones
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unlimited.
Moreover
, in my
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plain
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point
of view, there are lots of benefits for both sides.
However
, the employers' drawbacks are not
ignoreable
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ignorable
.
For example
,
although
the volunteers do not receive any wages and do not support financially , they achieve their chief aims of experience and being helpful. On the plus side, there is no concern about their future because
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careers are temporary ,so they can leave whenever they want. On the other side, there are some disadvantages for governments . Admittedly, they are not capable of counting on young employees for a long period of time, and youngsters might pass the
projects
before it completely finishes. To conclude, in many richer societies, there are numerous adolescents
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keen on being in either new or multifarious situations. Some of them prefer to take a risk and work freely in
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countries suffering from poverty. I strongly believe the young people's advantages outweigh the
administers
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' benefits . Admittedly, something because of
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of responsibility , young ones abandon
projects
before ending.
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