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task 2 academic Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Today, certain
people
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 argue that there are too many
choices
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 for us to choose
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 I strongly believe that we have lots of
options
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 in
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 era. Some reasons will be
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 explained in the essay.
Firstly
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, the massive development of the digital world cannot be overlooked. We can find anything or anyone through the
internet
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. Once we are looking for something via the
internet
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, the
internet
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 itself records the history of all our past searches.
This
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 will allow the
internet
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 to know what we need and give us a lot of
choices
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 for what we are looking for by means of ads.
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we
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 want to buy a new vacuum cleaner,
then
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 we search
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on google which one is the best. The
internet
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 is likely to show us many different types of vacuum
cleaner
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 through
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ads, even when we are using the
internet
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 for different purposes.
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, many
people
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 feel uncertain and unsatisfied with their
choices
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.
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 is because there are too many
options
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 we can choose
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 Some research said when
people
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 have lots of
options
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, they tend to try and feel curious about those
choices
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.
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, when we already decide something, the other
options
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 which we have not tried lead us to
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 of feeling of what we have chosen. To illustrate, when we come to an ice cream shop and it has more than ten flavours that we can buy, we need to spare more time to decide what flavour we want. Once we buy one flavour, we may come again to the shop to buy another flavour until we try them all.
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,
this
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 habit can have negative effects because we are never satisfied with what we have decided. In conclusion, I think nowadays,
people
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 have too many
choices
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 to decide.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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