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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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present
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 a large number of
population
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the population
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 want to be self-employed without working under others. According to the growing population of the world, it is very important to be a
self dependent
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self-dependent
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 person, though it
also
 has a risk of
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bankrupted
bankruptcy
bank-rupted
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being bank-rupted
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.
To begin
 with,
however
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 the population of maximum countries is increasing very rapidly but the job sector is not developing compare to
this
. So, .men are trying to stand
their
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on their
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 own feet,
such
 as in Bangladesh, many students after completing their graduation involve in agriculture by setting
their
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up their
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 own fisheries or dairy firming. Apart from
this
, it
also
 makes employment for other public of
this
 area, which is
also
 very important for the economic development of a country.
Furthermore
, working in own fisheries or firm
also
 does not give
stress
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 of being jobless as well as other pressure
such
 as time limit, target filling etc.
On the contrary
, in
case
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the case
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 of setting
a
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firm,
fisharies
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fisheries
,
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a business
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business
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businesses
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 need a large fund which is
also
 very tough to manage.
Additionally
, after taking a big amount of bank loan sometimes people become unable to pay
it
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for their losses which
also
make
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makes
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 them
a
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bankrupt
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they
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lost their full property.
Moreover
, it
also
 can create
problem
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problems
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 in
availability
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the availability
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 of expert manpower for a company. In conclusion,
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modern
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a modern
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world
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 it is become beneficial to become self-employed
with
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by
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 accepting the risk and problems in
head
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the head
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 as well as be patient and strong to face
the
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new challenges.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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