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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As the global population expands, the desire for fossil fuels
also
 skyrockets. Many think that we should open up the unfound land to be able to use the resources it has. I absolutely disagree with
this
 statement.
First
 of all,
instead
 of finding new places for mining, numerous nations have started to harness the
power
 of green energy
such
 as solar
power
, wind
power
, and
hydro
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power
 as an alternative to fossil fuels.
In addition
, many countries are trying to be less dependent on natural oil and gas.
For example
, countries
such
 as Singapore
,
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has
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 started to replace
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gas-powered
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gas powered
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 buses with
electric powered
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 ones to reduce the dependency on crude oil.
Secondly
, if we do not open up those pieces of land for resource mining, we will lessen the pollution.
Moreover
 ,the flora and fauna will be able to thrive and the air will be much cleaner. We have to use drills to get the resources underground and doing that will have a detrimental
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effect
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affect
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 on the soil and dirt
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 plants use to grow.
For instance
, if that area is in the tropical rainforest, an astronomical number of trees would have to be cut down to be able to drill underground.
As a result
,
this
 would have a tremendous impact on the environment and our health In summary, there are definitely pros and cons to discovering new areas that store the resources we might need
such
 as gas and oil.
However
, I believe that the pros outweigh the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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