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some people view the conflict between teenagers and parents as a necessary part of growing up, while others view it as something negative which should be avoided. discuss both views and give your own opinion. five reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowloedge or experience.

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A number of people argue that the process to gain adults is making a dispute with
parents
, while another side said something false which should be restricted. We All know that being against
parents
 is ill-norm as long as in the right way. In my religion told that we have to obey our
parents
 because the pray is granted. Whereas, if our
parents
 give commands to us for being poor, we can decline their asking. I believe that making decisions on our own is obtained through growing up,
therefore
 the different opinions should occur at least with our
parents
. In
this
 writing, I will light on the necessity of family conflict and the against. The Dissent will arise along with the child going to adult
consequently
 the oldster must know
this
 stage of being an adult. If talking about the teenager's authorization
such
 as educational options, hobbies, and the adult aim, the young must select on their own.
Parents
 cannot intervene in what the young want to do.
For instance
, found in university admission cases when
parents
 wish their child to apply to medical majors, but their kid wants art.
Parents
 must be open-minded about the talent of their young and give the chance for their options. As teenagers should define the choice aim,
hence
 dissension can be reduced.
On the other hand
, opposing the parent's opinion is a big sin. All commands must be obeyed inasmuch as the choice selected by
parents
 is the invocation of
parents
 heard by god.
Moreover
, the parent's prayer has better life goals. In the sample, the
parents
 desire the young to become civil servants,
however
, the young want to be content creators as YouTubers.
Parents
 know that in the future life is getting harder,
hence
 stable income is important. In conclusion, I know that every people have their own goals for growth no exception for juvenile, the
parents
 will control their chap for getting a better soul contrary to the young has own life opinion. Making discussions with
parents
 will make the best solutions for both.
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