Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Healthy
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A healthy
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lifestyle
life style
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lifestyle
a
leading life in the best Correct article usage
apply
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way
away
, there are Correct your spelling
way
very
important thing that Add an article
a very
the very
help
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helps
for example
exercising without exaggerating or walking for Linking Words
a
30 minutes every day, Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
the
food and diet Correct article usage
apply
is
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are
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important
importat
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important
nutricionist
who has Correct your spelling
nutritionist
a knowledge
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knowledge
a piece of knowledge
in
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of
this
can be helpful, avoiding the consumption of foods that Linking Words
content
excess sugar Replace the word
contain
suah
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such
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so
soft
drink, and Add an article
a soft
also
fat like fast food, sleeping 8 hours a day is very important.
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health
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healthy
do
exercise, fx; Wrong verb form
doing
read
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reading
a books
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a book
books
having
a good relationship with family, friends and Correct word choice
and having
couple
is important.
Because de body and mind are so connected if both are healthy we would Fix the agreement mistake
couples
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have
havae
a healthy Correct your spelling
have
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lifestyle
life style
.
Talking about anxiety is a Correct your spelling
lifestyle
mental emotional
disturbance, fx Add a hyphen
mental-emotional
other
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others
such
as depression, Linking Words
behavior
, Change the spelling
behaviour
obsessive-compulsive
disorder.
Young people are more vulnerable, anxiety is a feeling Correct word choice
and obsessive-compulsive
fear
and causes the person to feel nervous, very strong Change preposition
of fear
headeaches
, they are generally angry, they live worried about problems in the family, with friends or maybe for money in the house, bored and tired Correct your spelling
headaches
too
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to
simptoms
.
Young people Correct your spelling
symptoms
symptom
also
suffer from anxiety about ending Linking Words
in
their Change preposition
apply
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relationship
relationsip
or other problems.
Everything happens due to a lack of communication at home and having bad friends who give bad advice, Correct your spelling
relationships
its
difficult to identify, they need Correct your spelling
it's
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professional
profesional
help, they suffer a lot and everything affects them.
On many Correct your spelling
professional
occasions
they come to suicide, alcoholism, drugs, and many bad decisions for their lives.
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It's
dangeruos
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dangerous
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because as I explained before and seeing the differences, the body and the mind are connected and work together, it is important to take care of both to be healthy.Remove the comma
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