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Some people believe that it is best for people to be honest at all times. Others, however, believe that it is occasionally necessary to lie. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays ,it is important
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behave according to the
situations
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. A certain group of people say that it is best
to
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 be honest all the time because honesty is the best key
of
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 an
individuals
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 personality . Whereas, others say that it is necessary to lie occasionally
because
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apply
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to protect important
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relations
realtions
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relations
.
This
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later
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 school of thought. On one hand , some people
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argue
aruge
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argue
 that it is always necessary for an individual to be honest as it
state
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 the personality of
an
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 person.
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,
honestly
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 is the major key
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human
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 being's real character .
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, pupils should be
truthful
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 no matter what the situation is .Even human beings like to stay around honest pupils because it is
more easy
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 to trust
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personality
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personalities
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,
also
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 it is necessary to be one
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among
amongst
amongs
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among
 them . For an instance , primary schools are teaching more
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moral
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a moral
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lesson
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lessons
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 than
educational
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oneseducational
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 , as moral lessons are more important in real life .
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, it is said that occasionally lying is important to protect certain bonds , to get ridge of big problems,
to
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 avoid punishment.
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, to protect particular relationships,
person
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a person
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intend
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 to assert
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a lie
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lie
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lies
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 to keep the bond alive as it is the major backbone of an
individuals
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individual's
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 life.
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, one of the major
reason
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 behind
is
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 maintaining privacy. So
an
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individuals often lie to stay happy and for his own mental peace . To give an example ,as per the survey by
gnlu
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only
 says that 95%
people
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of people
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 lie for the betterment of themselves as well as others. To conclude,
although
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 honesty is very crucial in our daily life ,
this
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lie
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lies
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 occasionally . In my
opinion
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 it is necessary to lie sometimes for being happy and for your mental health ,
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also
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and also
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 from avoiding embarrassment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integrity
  • trustworthiness
  • credibility
  • transparency
  • accuracy
  • deception
  • ethical dilemmas
  • universal
  • moral absolutes
  • compassionate
  • sincerity
  • untruths
  • social harmony
  • cultural norms
  • situational factors
  • dishonesty
  • personal gain
  • relationships
  • consequences
  • context
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