Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Health awareness had drastically increased over the years.

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realisation has come with the alarming surge of diseases. While many

people

think they should be responsible for their own health others believes it is the government's duty to do it. In the following ,paragraphs I will discuss both of the views and explain

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the good rationale behind them.

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every individual has free will and they should not be forced to do anything. Requirements for a healthier lifestyle can not be suitable for everyone because they may be too hard to apply.

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choosing not to smoke might be great for the lungs but some

people

prefer to enjoy the moment rather than long-term health benefits. Since society members are free to do anything, nothing should be forced upon them.

On the other hand

, the government can promote healthier living. Authorities have the power to

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peoples’ behaviour

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free gym memberships, building pools for folks or preparing organic food for schoolchildren. With

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people

will be more encouraged to choose the right option for their good. To sum up, I believe each person’s life and decisions are ultimately in their own control,

on the contrary

governments might enact laws and offer benefits to the populace to encourage

people

to act better. I think both of them need to play an equal part in themselves and society.