People are of the opinion that children’s behavior should be controlled by their parents and teachers. Others do believe that children should be free to do as they like. Discuss both views and state your opinion
On the one hand,
public
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the public
think
that Correct subject-verb agreement
thinks
parents
and teachers should control Change noun form
children's
childrens'
Correct your spelling
children's
behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
On the other hand
, other people claim that children
should control them. From my point of view, on the one way
, every children
should have a 'Change to a singular noun
child
controller
', such
as they can give them light
Correct article usage
a light
future
. On the other way
, if parents
give them
freedom Correct pronoun usage
apply
their
Change preposition
to their
children
, it can cross them to crime
.
At all times, every child has been educating
by teachers or Wrong verb form
educated
parents
. It is clear that every youngster from early
age should have a good 'Add an article
an early
controller
' of their behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
,
because their own Remove the comma
apply
future
depends of
them. A 'Change preposition
on
controller
' could be people such
as,
a Remove the comma
apply
teacher
, parents
, a tutor and so on. These 'controllers' can point to right
Correct article usage
the right
way
children
. For example
, at school studies a pupil with the worst behavior
in class, so he can spoil Change the spelling
behaviour
over
the class, Change preposition
apply
however
, teacher
should not miss it, because he would spoil all guys Add an article
the teacher
a teacher
at
class. Change preposition
in
Teacher
can put him on the right Add an article
The teacher
A teacher
way
, and educate his behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
to
the right Change preposition
in
way
too. So the main task of a teacher
is educate
him on time.
It is clear that not educated people in the Fix the infinitive
to educate
future
can be bad personalities, such
as,
pickpockets, burglaries, vandalists and shoplifters. If Remove the comma
apply
child
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a child
Add a missing verb
does have
have
not his ownChange the verb form
has
a
'Correct article usage
apply
controller
' it can cross them with crime
. Obviously that if Add an article
a crime
the crime
parents
do not educate their offspring how
to choose Change preposition
on how
a friends
, they will be appeared in bad company, where Correct the article-noun agreement
friends
a friend
the
accomplish bad deals, Correct your spelling
they
so
Correct word choice
apply
it
can cross Correct pronoun usage
which
them
Change the pronoun
their
crime
. Change preposition
to crime
For instance
, if a teenager has linked to a person who sells drugs, so
in the near Correct word choice
apply
future
he will be a 'crimer
'. Or on the other example, Correct your spelling
crime
crimes
offspring
see that someone is robbing Correct word choice
if offspring
mobile
phone from a person, it is likely that he will be a pickpocketer.
In conclusion, I want to say that all Correct article usage
a mobile
parents
, teacher
and tutors have to give education to Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
behavior
offspringChange the spelling
behaviour
,
because it can prevent Remove the comma
apply
crime
and other bad accomplish
.Replace the word
accomplishments
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
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