It is not wise for an industry to replace its inexperienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that it is inappropriate for a company to terminate their contract with long-term experienced staff, and employ new inexperienced crowd who are cheaper. Personally, I feel

this

policy is unwise and cruel, and ought to be phased out. I strongly support

this

view against most enterprises and will elucidate my idea in

this

essay.

To begin

with, the industries known for

this

policy of replacing their old employees with new ones tend to have staff members void of commitment.

That is

, the individuals in

such

a working environment will not be devoted, or contribute their quota effectively for the growth of the firm.

For example

, a man who has worked in Macdonalds for almost a decade suddenly gets sacked without a cogent reason, more often than not, solely based on MacDonald's law of replacement. Other gangs on hearing of the changes would act nonchalantly which is attributed to the fact that they may be abandoned someday by their employers,

hence

resulting in a possible dramatic decrease in the general productivity of the eatery.

Additionally

this

act from the superiors creates stiff competition among staff members thereby leading to both physical and psychological stress in them.

Furthermore

, abandoning the experienced ones for starters means a company is giving up on skills for novices and amateurs,

this

can devalue the enterprise

as well as

have a negative impact on stock prices. To buttress

this

, the well-adapted squad have a higher tendency to effectively deliver their teams' projects on time and accurately.

For instance

, a business analyst who has been in the manufacturing industry for a long time is well acquainted with the team, the company's policies and expectations

as well as

the stakeholders with high power and interest. It is inevitable that

this

analyst will easily proffer viable solutions for any project within a stipulated timeframe but I won't say the same for a starter.

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clear comprehensive ideas

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The essay is logically structured, with each paragraph building upon the previous one to advance your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

317 words

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It is not wise for an industry to replace its inexperienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries, there have been schemes to encourage older professional people to retrain as school teachers. Do you feel that this is likely to have beneficial effects on education? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have advantages or more disadvantages?

Research shows that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people engage in unhealthy activities. What is the cause of this? What can be done? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experiences.