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Education in financial management should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement,give reasons and relevant example.

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stock marketing is gaining ground.some folks opine that education in investment management should be
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 element in the school,
this
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 the child to be organised with their funds. I do not strongly accord with
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,
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 coming essay shall express some of my ideas with relevant
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. On the one
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 if wealth management is taught in high school,the pupils will graduate armed with financial know how they will learn how to organise
theironey
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their money
the irony
 and spend
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misely
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misery
. Coupled with,how to invest their fund in the scheme so they can get
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good outcomes from
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in fact
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 when young
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ones are
ones
onesare
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ones are
 allowed to handle
money
 on their own at learning institutes ,it
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 a sense of responsibility in them.what's more ,the low standard of living that people have when they
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mismanage
 their finances and get loses in their business.
For instance
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conducted by the tribune found that people
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who do not know how to invest their finances are suffered from loss and
it
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 leads to poor living standards.
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 two sides so
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there are
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 drawbacks
of
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this
 trend.
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first
 and foremost,
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 if the school will add one more subject
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 their
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study as
studies
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studies
a
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result,a student may feel the pressure of
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 and get depressed.
similarly
 young
oned
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 do not focus on their other primary subject and lose their
concerntrations
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concentration
concentrations
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studies
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.To illustrate the headlines of today 's newspaper reveal that
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adding the extra cerriciullam activities
lead
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 to Deficiency in concentration and they feel
pressure
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 of one more subject. In a
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although
money
 management and kids
in
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future to manage their
money
 and make them responsible. Yet the demerits of
this
 idea can not be
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 it can make children
money
 minded.
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