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Some people argue that public should be allowed to have guns. Other do not agree. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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People
 are divided on the issue of
gun
ownership
. There are some, who hold the opinion that
gun
ownership
 should be allowed, as it is in many
countries
such
 as the US, whereas others opine that
people
in general
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 should not be permitted to keep them.
This
 essay intends to analyze both views. I,
however
, side with the latter view. A major reason why governments should not allow
people
 to have
guns
 is because of the potential for accidents. In America,
for example
, you can legally shoot
people
 if you find them robbing your house, but
this
 can lead to
people
 dying over cases of mistaken identity.
In addition
, there are crimes where
people
 act rashly or in anger, so
guns
 that were intended for
defense
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 are often used aggressively. Another important argument against owning
guns
 is that there can be intentional damage caused by
guns
. It is statistically evident that the number of
gun
-related crimes is higher in
countries
 where firearm
ownership
 is legal.
Countries
 like America,
for example
, suffer from a disproportionately high number of
fatal
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shooting
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shootings
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, in comparison with most other
countries
.
On the other hand
, those in favour of
gun
ownership
 say that without the freedom to bear arms, there is no
self-defense
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. Without
self-defense
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, there would most likely be more break-ins, robberies and even deaths. In the UK it’s illegal to have a
gun
, yet criminals can still get one. So if anyone who had a
gun
 used it harmfully, you would have no
self-defense
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. They
also
 argue that shooting is a sport, and so
being
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 prevented from owning their own firearm, is both unjust and a violation of their rights. Their argument is justified to some extent, but the harms of allowing
guns
 are much more. To sum up, it is clear that the permissibility of
guns
 can lead to injury and death, both intentionally and unintentionally.
Although
 there are points to support
gun
ownership
, they are weak in comparison with the rising tide of
gun
 crime, a situation, which will only continue to worsen.
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