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Some people argue that public should be allowed to have guns. Other do not agree. Discuss both and give your opinion.

People
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 are divided on the issue of
gun
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ownership
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. There are some, who hold the opinion that
gun
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ownership
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 should be allowed, as it is in many
countries
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such
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 as the US, whereas others opine that
people
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in general
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 should not be permitted to keep them.
This
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, side with the latter view. A major reason why governments should not allow
people
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 to have
guns
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 is because of the potential for accidents. In America,
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, you can legally shoot
people
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 if you find them robbing your house, but
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 can lead to
people
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 dying over cases of mistaken identity.
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, there are crimes where
people
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 act rashly or in anger, so
guns
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 that were intended for
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 are often used aggressively. Another important argument against owning
guns
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 is that there can be intentional damage caused by
guns
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. It is statistically evident that the number of
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-related crimes is higher in
countries
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 where firearm
ownership
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 is legal.
Countries
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 like America,
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, suffer from a disproportionately high number of
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shooting
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, in comparison with most other
countries
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.
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, those in favour of
gun
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ownership
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 say that without the freedom to bear arms, there is no
self-defense
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self-defence
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. Without
self-defense
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, there would most likely be more break-ins, robberies and even deaths. In the UK it’s illegal to have a
gun
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, yet criminals can still get one. So if anyone who had a
gun
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 used it harmfully, you would have no
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. They
also
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 argue that shooting is a sport, and so
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 prevented from owning their own firearm, is both unjust and a violation of their rights. Their argument is justified to some extent, but the harms of allowing
guns
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 are much more. To sum up, it is clear that the permissibility of
guns
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 can lead to injury and death, both intentionally and unintentionally.
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 there are points to support
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ownership
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, they are weak in comparison with the rising tide of
gun
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 crime, a situation, which will only continue to worsen.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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