The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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the number of people using
internet
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has
growth
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by a large number and
this
is
one
of the main reasons that we change our life and adapt
it
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to online technology. Alongside
good
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effects that online network has in our
lives
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it causes so many negative and serious problems.
One
of the
first
negative points of
internet
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is that it is accessible so children can visit every single
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.
In these
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days people are uploading everything
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internet
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such
as violence and pornography that must not be seen by a juvenile. Watching private tapes or harsh acts can easily make a terrible impact on an adolescent. Another big problem is the increase
of
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online fraud and blackmailing. Most sites ask for our ID to let us access their information, yet scammers can hack into websites and reach our personal data.
Threating
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Threatening
Treating
to share private pictures and films or
try
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to hack
to
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our
credits
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is going to become the worst nightmare for people. It is necessary for governments to take
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good action and pass some laws to prevent youngsters
visiting
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none suitable websites.
In addition
to that parents must monitor their children’s online surfing. Companies and sites must improve their online security and try to be
one
step ahead of online hustlers. Approving heavy punishment for online bullies can hopefully
drops
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online fraud. To conclude my
contests
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I must say that
internet
technology is
one
of the greatest innovations of all time but in the wrong hand and improper
management
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it can be harmful so
besides
its
attractions
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businesses and governments must find
new
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way
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to make it safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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