The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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to online technology. Alongside the good effects that online network has in our ,lives it causes so many negative and serious problems.
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of the first negative points of
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is that it is accessible so children can visit every single website. These days people are uploading everything on
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such
as violence and pornography that must not be seen by a juvenile. Watching private tapes or harsh acts can easily
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a terrible impact on an adolescent. Another big problem is the increase in online fraud and
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. Most sites ask for our ID to let us access their information, yet scammers can hack into websites and
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our personal data. Treating to share private pictures and films or trying to hack into our credits is going to become the worst nightmare for people. It is necessary for governments to take
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good action and pass some laws to prevent youngsters from visiting none suitable websites.
In addition
to that parents must monitor their children’s online surfing. Companies and sites must improve their online security and try to be
one
step ahead of online hustlers. Approving heavy punishment for online bullies can hopefully drop online fraud.
To conclude
my contest I must say that
internet
technology is
one
of the greatest innovations of all time but in the wrong hand and
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,management it can be harmful so
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businesses and governments must find new ways to make it safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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